As I picked the juicy
A really powerful and well written piece of work here. Well done! I thought your simile about the storm hitting the farm like a baseball bat hitting a ball was amazing. The personification of the thunder aiming at the barn was great too. It was really clever to go from calmness and peace at the beginning, to chaos at the end. Great work.
Watch out for how you write speech next time. You wrote answered and wondered with capitals and really they should be lower case.
You have put in some lovely descriptions and very nice similes for e.g: a storm hitting the bat like a baseball bat. That was the simile that stood out for me. Well done!
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