My Diary

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4 Responses to My Diary

  1. Jenny says:

    I love it…. I’m sure that Alfie is really happy in his new home…

  2. anna says:

    Hi Jessa,
    I really enjoyed reading your (Hamster’s)diary. I loved the use of wow words like ‘unexpectedly’. I also liked the ending ‘ got to go and collect some food’. It made me laugh.
    You forgot to put a comma in the middle -however,sometimes, and, stroked,especially.
    Anyway I enjoy reading your work. Keep it up!

  3. jowy6 says:

    That is a nice story. I like the story because it was informal and it showed that the hamster was happy where it lived and how it was treated. You could have added a little bit more of how it felt but good work.

  4. dylan says:

    That was great, I liked all of it because the picture reminds me of my Aunty’s hamster but sadly it died. So the hamster was writing a diary, that was nice. Always remember that story it belongs to you.

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