The best day of my life!

Dear diary,

That was the best day of my life! At first I thought it was going to be the start of another boring day at school but it turned out not to be.

At 6:30am

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5 Responses to The best day of my life!

  1. Mr. Ruddy says:

    Hi Obinna,
    Oh my!! What a diary entry. The day went from one extreme to the other. I really enjoyed the lovely chatty style you used throughout your diary entry. It really made me want to read on. Also, you chose some very funny events and described them so cleverly. A great balance of speech and description. I like the way you started by telling us it was the best day of your life and then explained why.
    To improve, I think you could have worked a bit more on your ending. It seemed to just stop. Maybe a comment about what tomorrow might have in store for you would have helped you end less bluntly. Great effort though – really enjoyable!
    Mr. Ruddy

  2. clare says:

    Hi Obinna,
    I really liked this picece of work it was amazing.I liked when you said I was late for prision then you put the brackets and said school it really made me laugh and wanted to carry on reading to see what was going to happen. I also liked when you said your mouth opened like a goldfish it was a good way to decribe it. Well done Obinna keep up the good work.

  3. kube6 says:

    Hi Obinna,
    This piece of work was excellent. I liked when you called the teacher, monster. It really made me laugh this really made me want to read on. There was another part that I liked which was when you called the school, prison. I would recommend a merit. well done.

  4. Hi Obinna,
    The best day of my life! sounds good. I really enjoyed the lovely chatty style you used throughout your diary entry. I liked when you said I was late for prision then you put the brackets and said school it really made me laugh and wanted to carry on reading to see what was going to happen. Great effort though

  5. sophia says:

    Hi Obinna,

    Oh God! What a diary entry. The day went from one extreme to the other.I like the way you started by telling us it was the best day of your life and then explained why.I liked when you said I was late for prision then you put the brackets and said school it really made me laugh and wanted to carry on reading to see what was going to happen.I would recommend a merit. well done.

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