Cries of help

Why

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7 Responses to Cries of help

  1. Mr. Ruddy says:

    Hi Obinna,
    Wow!! What an interesting idea. I will never ever use a rubber again without thinking of your poem. I will think of all the silent screams in our class everyday as the dignity of rubbers is disintegrated!! It was funny, creative and really made me think about life from a different perspective.
    Can you think of some other objects and how they would feel about the way we treat them? Please reply back.
    Oh dear! I have just thought of how a pencil would feel when being sharpened!!!!

    • obinna says:

      Yes, I can think of how other objects like a pencil or the bin. The pencil doesn’t like to be sharpened becuase it’s painful and the bin doesn’t like to be treated as rubbish

  2. anna says:

    Hi Obinna,
    Your poem about rubbers was very humourus and interesting. First, I thought you were talking about robbers but when I carried on reading I thought to myself ‘Oh!, those rubbers’. You also made me smile by saying ”why do people stick us up their noses?” I think that you need no improvements. Well done and keep it up!

    • obinna says:

      Hi Anna,
      I could understand how you got confused by rubbers and robbers. Thank-you for the comments I really appreciate it.

  3. julia says:

    Hi Obinna,
    What a wonderful poem! I love all the words and discriptive phrases you used like ‘Disintegrating all our dignity’. You also managed to make it funny- I was splitting with laughter when I read the part about sticking the rubbers up their noses! The title also is a bit wieard- when I read it, I thought it would be about someone needing help. You really made this a quality peice of work! I can’t wait for more. Thanks!

  4. jessa says:

    Hi Obinna,
    Did you say ‘why do people stick it up their noses?” Well if you did… that was hillarious! The line that stood out to me was when you wrote ‘Stop!!’ because you only used one word for that line.

  5. jessa says:

    Hi Obinna,
    Did you say ‘why do people stick it up their noses?” Well if you did… that was hillarious! The line that stood out to me was when you wrote ‘Stop!!’ because you only used one word for that line. This work is first class so I don’t really need to say what could be improved because it is perfect. I wish you could write more funny poems about other objects too because you are really good at it!

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