Potion (part 1)

once upon or time the lived a scientist called mark. He wanted to make a animal potion but it went terribly wrong. THEN SUDDENLY IT EXPLODED INTO HIS BODY!!! He rubed  his forehead WOW! What happened to me.WOW!I feel like a different person. He stood up and looked into a mirror and saw was hencher and stronger. He heared a scream and ran to a window and he took to the sky like mario with a wing cap. He saw a person geting robbed and he droped down and punched the robber and the robber ran away. people cheered for him “YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY” “GO MARK GO MARK” the crowed screamed.

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3 Responses to Potion (part 1)

  1. Mr. Ruddy says:

    Hi Erin,
    Well done for getting on the blog again. A great post here filled with some great vocabulary. I liked the way you added a simile about Mario. Please tell me what a wing cap is though Erin? Now when are you going to do Part 2. I want to know what will happen next. Keep up the great work Erin.
    Next time, watch out for your capital letters at the start of a sentence and for people’s names.

  2. Jake says:

    Hi Erin,
    This is an intreaging story. Although remember to always start sentenses with a capitol letter!


    Tetherdown Primary School

  3. myron says:

    Hi Erin
    I love this piece of work. I have to know what happens in part 2. Please write part 2 soon. Keep blogging.

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