the selfish giant

There will be a few paragraphs and each of those paragraphs will be in different points of view of the objects/ people in the story.

I howled onto the giants roof. My friend the hail threw her ice on the roof so it crashed. The snow covered everything… but the children came. the warmth of their hearts frightened us. We fled.

The children came! The children finally came! We opened out our petals and stretched them, and welcomed the sun into us. We were so happy, that some of us turned glittery, and gold… and rainbow coloured. We gave beautiful scents for them.

About olivia6

Hi, when I grow up I would like to be a lawyer. I am aiming for high levels in my work. I love science!!! I am a nature lover and I love animals like reptiles e.g snakes, lizards- and of course animals e.g lion, tiger, deer, rabits and so on. And as all my friends know, I absolutaly love cats and bees.

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3 Responses to the selfish giant

  1. clare says:

    Hi Olivia
    Wow that a very good piece of work. I cant wait to hear how it will sound. I know it will sound fantastic.
    when you said “come into heaven. be peace. ” It was a very good sentence I really liked it. So i am going to start using sentence like that know. I don’t think there anything to improve.
    Well done Olivia and keep up the good work.

  2. julia says:

    Hi Olivia,
    I love the way you wrote from different points of view of different things from the story! It was really smart how you made each section a different colour- it made everything clearer. I also love your descriptions, especially this line: ‘He was blind with tears, his lonely cry echoing in my ears.’ You could try to add more descriptions next time. Thanks a lot!

  3. olivia6 says:

    Hi everyone,
    Thank you all for your lovely comments!

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